Lost in the music she danced,
Danced her heart out.
Their eyes met,
Immediately he knew she was the one,
She felt it too.
She fled off to the balcony,
He followed her desperately.
She soon felt trapped.
Her heart beating fast, eyes dilating,
He couldn’t keep the smile off his face.
The music stopped.
And so did her heart.
As it lay in his hand,
Ripped from her chest.
It was all over.
Goosebumps…..
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Thanx Rena! 🙂
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Its beautiful. The ending gave me chills too.
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Glad it made you feel something! 🙂
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Very interesting read, looking forward to your future work !
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Thankyou 🙂
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oh wow, dark
nice twist – had to read it twice to fully get it
keep on
love brett fish
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Thankyou! I appreciate it! 🙂
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Hey!
This gave me goosebumps! I’m looking forward for more of your post!
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Thanks Demetrius! 🙂
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Hi,
I met you in the Community Pool. That is one sad poem! I didn’t how know it would end. Great job moving my emotions with your words.
Janice
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Thank you Janice! 🙂
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Hi again,
I forgot to mention that I know Huckleberry Friend Universe.
Janice
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I loved this. 🙂
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Happy you did! 🙂
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Wow. That just gave me a chill.
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Glad you were able to feel the emotion behind the words! 🙂
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Yikes! Your story is short and sweet.
I found your link on Susie’s blog party.
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Thanks and welcome aboard Allan!
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Wow, this poem could be interpreted as either creepy or ‘that’s just the way love goes.’ It was very chilling, very Jack the Ripper. But then it can also be read as a woman running away from love, failing, and now the man has her heart in his hands (figuratively).
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Yes! That was the intention!:)
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Awesome and welcome to the blogosphere!
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Thank you Alice!:)
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Very cool post! I saw the link on the Halloween Blog party and am so glad I found your blog. Happy Halloween!
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Thank you and Happy Halloween to you too!<3
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